[asnyder]

Thanks for the feedback. We do have that huge header that says "Build for the Web Faster & Easier!", thus we would hope you immediately conclude it's web based. For most of those points above, the keywords are actually links to more information for each of those points.

Line 3 in particular is meant to emphasize that you can deploy across all browsers and operating systems, this is in fact not what every web page does, as most web pages would normally require tinkering to work in various different browsers versions.

However, I do see your point. We're in the process of adding a functional code sample to an area of the home, however, it's very difficult to strike the balance to appeal to those that make the software decisions and hardcore developers. Something like vows is clearly targeted towards the hardcore, whereas we're attempting to target a broader range, which includes the hardcore developers.

It is difficult and definitely something we're trying to improve. We appreciate your honest feedback and will definitely take your advice into consideration for our next update. Thank You.

[scott_s]

It's way too much. Complete overload. And, unfortunately, as the parent poster mentioned, despite there being a wall o' text, there's not much actual information.

You should be able to answer this simple question: where do you want my eyes to go first? Right now, there's a few different headlines and buttons competing for my attention. When that happens, I often don't bother figuring out where I should look and give up.

I think you have the attitude that someone is already interested in what you've done. If that's true, then more information is better. You need to come at this from the perspective that most people won't care what you've done. You need to convince them you did something cool. Make sure that after five seconds of being on your site, they know what you think is most important.

[asnyder]

It's very interesting. We use to have much more technically minded copy, but that wasn't as effective. Interestingly enough the points that were criticized are in fact some of the actual core tenets of NOLOH, it's not buzz, those are it's most attractive features.

Clearly, what's happening here is that the skeptical reader is dismissing them, and certainly not clicking to get more information when more information is available.

We'll definitely try to strike a fair balance in the updates ahead.

[scott_s]

I'm not necessarily arguing for more technical copy. I'm certainly arguing for less copy. That means what copy you have must convey more information.

Imagine you came into a restaurant and asked, "What's today's special?" And the waiter replied, "It's the best meal you'll ever have. You will be sated. You'll experience savory tastes, with a hint of sweet and salt. This meal will solve all of your hunger problems."

"Yeah, but what is it?"

"Oh, it's steak."

Give us the meat, then sell us on it. Don't try to sell it before you tell us what it is.

[xiongchiamiov]

And by god, please don't use a screencast as the primary way of telling us what the meat is. Don't even consider it.

[csomar]

Please read http://www.alistapart.com/articles/writingcontentthatworksfo... and may be you'll change your opinion about how web copies should be.