[jonnathanson]

It would be a lot more effective if it were elegant. The colloqualisms shoehorned into that sentence do it no favors.

[blakeja]

Welcome to the rest of the world where people talk that way everywhere, everyday.

[jonnathanson]

It's not about the use of those phrases; it's about the way he integrates them into the sentence. It's clumsy.

When I use the word "elegant" here, I don't mean it in the sense of formality of language. I mean it in the sense of conveying a point as clearly and economically as possible. The biggest problem with his sentence is that it's overloaded with baggage. It reads as if the author liked the sound of a couple of fun phrases, then crammed them into the sentence.