[amiheines]

Virtual hug to you!

This is a great version of the ad, thank you thank you thank you!

Only rule violated in this version is that it refers too much to ME and too little to YOU the reader. I thought it's best to talk about 'what's in it for me' as the reader tends to be less interested in what I accomplished and more anout himself.

I will definitely use A/B testing using a version of the page based on your suggestion.

[orangethirty]

Only rule violated in this version is that it refers too much to ME and too little to YOU the reader.

I knew that would be your only criticism against it. But test it as I wrote it, please. Let's challenge your reader hypothesis.

[amiheines]

I got your version up and ready for A/B testing today!

Can you please submit the site in a new post to HN? I'm too new here and don't want to post my own web site here.

I promise to write a blog post on the results, this will be fun! Perhaps we can finally debunk one rule about writing sales letters.

[orangethirty]

Sure, why not? But when you make it big you have to buy me a pina colada. :)

Edit

Won't work. HN wont allow for the same URL to be posted twice. Change the URL with a A/B identifier and let me know. Email me (in profile).