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by jacquesm
5338 days ago
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I'm happy to accept the low blows, being a non-native English speaker/writer anything that will help me to improve is more than welcome. Of course it would be nice if such comments were accompanied by suggested fixes and/or constructive criticism of the content. But you can't have everything ;) |
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Here's my feedback, though: I thought your post read as if it had been written hastily. There were some mistakes that seemed careless, like not capitalizing Wikipedia or omitting hypens and dashes in constructs like non-hard science and pro-education. Additionally, there were some issues with sentence structure, especially comma splices, which bermanoid referred to above. For example, the second paragraph:
I guess it was to be expected the way I phrased things there so let me take a moment to correct this perception, the offending lines are right at the start in:
The comma there isn't valid, as it splits two independent clauses without a conjunction. I'd use a period instead, but I'd also rephrase slightly:
I guess it was to be expected with the way I phrased things, so let me take a moment to correct this perception. The offending lines are right at the start:
I'll take one last example:
You can study those subjects to your hearts content and there are lots of places online where you can discuss them until the cows come home.
First, hearts vs. heart's seems like another hasty oversight. This sentence, though, is a different type of run-on. Technically, if you put a comma before and, you're safe, but without it, us grammar nerds call it a fused sentence. This is a pretty serious nitpick, and this is very common among native speakers as well, but two of these in a row caught my eye.