It's only8 minutes since your responseso I'd just like to say that I almost immediately got the gist of your product before any changes. Long advertising experience means like a remedial English teacher I'm better than most reading poorer copy but I consider your(unchanged) copy very good. Unfortunately without the words"audit", "WORM" and"incident search" present or prominent I'm not your market. But I could think of many thousands of publication sites longing for your tool, if those terms applied.
> I'm better than most reading poorer copy but I consider your(unchanged) copy very good.
This is nice to hear/read, yet I'm a perfectionist who knows perfection do not exist. The pitch can always be improved and clarity/transparency is very important to us.
> Unfortunately without the words"audit", "WORM" and"incident search" present or prominent I'm not your market.
This proves my previous point, since we rely on Docker images to implement the monitoring/reactivity part, literally ANY workflow/business logic can be applied (but we've been told that it's hard to trust "it can do everything").
> But I could think of many thousands of publication sites longing for your tool, if those terms applied.