[matgillard]

What's stupid then?

[phnofive]

> See why, it’s probably an extra word you can cut. Or at the very least, a convoluted phrase you can simplify.

This advice is backwards, for example. Try:

> See why, it’s probably a convoluted phrase you can simplify. Or at the very least an extra word you can cut.

Better (I’ll even use a fun comma):

> It’s probably due to a convoluted phrase you can simplify, or an extra word you can cut.