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by BoorishBears
2015 days ago
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Something I will never understand... your character never uses personal pronouns in reference to their self. And I don't mean gendered pronouns, just pronouns like "I" and "We". It seems none of the characters do. - Instead of: "I need to get lunch" It's: "Need to get lunch." - "We need to get in there, and we need to do it fast" "Need to get in there. Need to do it fast" - "I'm tryin' alright?" "Tryin' alright? - "I like chocolate" "Like chocolate" - It's even more grating when you add in the forced sounding "Gruff Guy" voice the male V uses. I don't know what kind of weird tough guy vibe they were going for but it's like nails on a chalkboard sometimes. |
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(Noticed how I dropped ‘it’?)