Emails and everything sent to customers were always proofread by a native english speaker. I wrote this on my spare time but lesson learned for next time.
Here's a little bit of constructive advice. There are several places where you've made a "comma splice" error. That is, a comma (,) was used when a period (.) or semicolon (;) should have been used (or alternatively, a conjunction could be used). Example:
> We’ve interviewed a bunch, during one of the interviews after the candidate was done presenting, he looked at me, I looked at him, he did OK …
This should be instead:
> We’ve interviewed a bunch. During one of the interviews after the candidate was done presenting, he looked at me, and I looked at him. He did OK …
Sure, the grammar needs a little work but this sentence is the only glaring issue...
> He then asked this question “How is a typical call with a prospect looks like?”
Should be "How does a typical call with a prospect look?"
Also - great article! I've worked in sales and emails never worked, especially in this day and age of constant spam. Email is great for an info blast, but you will not close with an email.
My 2 cents: Fix the major issues on this article sooner than later. It is a great little post and if all goes well it will have a long tail of visitors or will get picked up again for a nice exposure spike. I think that makes it worth your time. Of course that is just my opinion.
You should absolutely be taking ohfunkyeah's advice, as in today. This is a great piece with some good ideas and good learning being shared, but the poor quality of delivery severely hampers their usefulness.
> We’ve interviewed a bunch, during one of the interviews after the candidate was done presenting, he looked at me, I looked at him, he did OK …
This should be instead:
> We’ve interviewed a bunch. During one of the interviews after the candidate was done presenting, he looked at me, and I looked at him. He did OK …