| > A Car Guy's right hand man An article, 4 nouns and an adjective. This isn't parseable without 3 or 4 passes. The idea is spot on, it's short and simple, but improve the English to make a reader's life easier. You have seconds to let someone know what you do and this is wasting time. > Torque Specs
> Fluid Capacities
> Body Dimensions
> Tow Ratings
> Maintenance Schedule Ruby, Python, Javascript... You told other commenter's here that this list is meaningful to people in the know. It's not, there is no context. Why are you listing these words? > We're building a community of comprehensive, accurate vehicle data. And we need your help gathering info about the cars and trucks you work on. Technicians and DIYers, join the beta program to get first access to the app and help shape the community. Now I know what you want, but not really why. What is in it for me? This will presumably take me time and effort to use, what do I get out of it. Don't tell me it is obvious, again if I substitute tech terms for auto terms I still have at best a vague sense of what I am getting myself in to. Paint a picture. |