Beyond the grammatical errors, misplaced punctuation and misspellings, and despite the relative novelty of the anecdotes, I thought the writing itself was dull and simplistic. Many paragraphs were just a string of blunt statements without any independent clauses.
Your comment isn't really addressing mine from the context in which it was given. My comment was in reply to someone implying criticism of the piece stems from its reading level being above that of a 12 or 13 year old, which isn't the case.
I'm simply proposing that the criticism is founded on actual flaws with the piece, rather than it being too complex to be understood by its detractors.
According to a copy+paste of the text into http://sarahktyler.com/code/sample.php, the article as a whole reaches Flesch-Kindaid grade level 7.