[creyes123]

I spent five minutes looking at the page. That is all I can spare for free. I have written books and hundreds of blog posts. Unfortunately, it is going to take a lot more than five minutes to thoroughly evaluate and rework the page. Have you considered using http://www.fiverr.com/?

Right away, I noticed some layout issues. I assume you already know about those. Overall, I like the layout and use of color. Here is a rewrite of the main tagline:

"Send offers to your customers through Facebook. Quick and easy. Much better than sending emails."

[soneca]

wow! Thanks, great sugestion about the tagline! I will use it right now.

I will take a look at fiverr. The thing is that I assumed is not that far off a good enough page, so an "amateur" native english speaker could spot a few mistakes on a quick look.

(and I wasn't wrong, I got a great copy sugestion and a lot of good corrections by pzxc below! :) )