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by omaranto
4160 days ago
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I suggest changing "it" to "SimCity" in the second sentence: > Ultimately it's a game to be played for entertainment, and if you can get some people to think about social issues as they play it that's wonderful, but it's still supposed to be enjoyable. Right now "it" seems to refer to "homelessness" from the previous sentence, which confused me a bit. |
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