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You're criticising this dude's writing and he got a meeting with Mike Moritz. Even if he didn't receive a positive outcome (and if this story is even true, I'm not doubting just saying) total props to the lad for getting a meeting via a cold email with one of the biggest venture investors in history.

How many other people can do the same thing?

In fact, it's actually irrelevant in this case that the writer made mistakes and could be better (all of us could be better). The most impressive point of the story is he showed enough courage to write to someone at the height of the VC industry and get a response and invite for a meeting.

Props to the lad.