| Visually too noisy. The bouncy "learn more" button gets in the way, and gives a cluttered feel to the front page. I can see you want me to click on it, but I think it's too much. (Real user testing may prove me wrong on this point). Maybe have the arrow next to "Learn more" pulse gently instead. The text on the first screen uses hard-to-read colours, needs proofreading ("with others at who are at"), and badly needs rewriting. Too many words. Too many "platforms" (they're a kind of shoe, aren't they?). Takes far too long to communicate the benefits. Here's my rough rewrite: ==== Share it live! See photos of what's going on around you. Hook up with the people taking them. ==== You also need some much, much more exciting content for the phone screen mock-up. What am I missing out on by not having Muro? Stuff below the fold is pretty good but, again, rewrite. To be honest, you suck at copy. Either read a book about writing copy for the web, or find someone who can write it for you. |