The writing aspect of this is all over the place and really messy, but I liked his story and felt a strong degree of empathy with it—especially the part about false starts and bad computer science education.
Thanks for the feedback. I'm definitely not the best writer out there but would like to be... I REALLY should have ran this through a spell checker and felt stupid when I finally did. If you have any more detailed critiques and feel strongly enough about them to share please feel free to email me.