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by sgaither
4730 days ago
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The page looks nice and you have a clear flow and call to action...but the copy could use tightening up all around. For example, the subhead: > New, exciting way of doing online courses Sounds like it's missing an article: "A new, exciting way of doing online courses" And is "doing" the right word? Maybe the verb should be: "taking" or change the sentence structure from "of doing" to "to take" There's a lot of little grammar and style things that should be polished...IMO it's a big factor in an online education's first impression |
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