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by noahc 4752 days ago
I.....I....I'm....I.....

I...I....

And that's your problem. Not a single thing about them. It should read something like this...

I noticed you've been working on innovating in X industry, and I've noticed recently that many folks are moving in X direction. Are you planning on moving in this direction to?

I've recently done a, b, and c. By leveraging b and c, I can help you achieve X. a is note worthy because, while not directly related to x, it shows I have skill f.

I'm looking for jr developer positions that allow me to grow, and projects a, b, and c will help you achieve x (faster, better, more completely, etc)....

Your pitches need to be about how you can help them and less about you. I've sent emails that basically said, "Your industry is heading in x direction, here's what I think about that. Oh, by the way I'm at least good enough to do fizz buzz" and gotten fairly positive responses out of that.

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Very good point. Shows more confidence and direction. Even my responses in this thread are inward. Kind of self-involved.

Hopefully this can help someone else in a similar situation. Working on a rewrite now I will share soon.