[zhobbs]

The copy on the Rakasheets site also stood out to me as a problem. As hahla stated, your customer is likely not a hacker. The other vendors they give their money to do not say things like, "... without the suck" or "Benefits - lots of 'em."

The value of the inventory you're tracking could be a significant chunk of your customer's life savings, so I'd want to convey professionalism and trustworthiness.

Regarding copywriting in general, I've never tried it, but if you need help you might try something like https://draftin.com/