| Your copy on the landing page (under the blue circle-ish images) is very hard to read. The logo has an issue with spacing between the letters. The "a" is too far fromn the first "l". The pricing page is not quite clear. What do I get with the free plan? Can I "friend" my co-workers? A paragraph explaining it would be nice. Five dollars seems like the wrong price for this sort of deal. Even the cheapest option on github is seven dollars. I would love to test your headline. The top segment of the landing page says nothing. There are no testimonials, no text explaining what you do, nothing. Just a signup box which does not seem to fit in the whole context. This copy has the wrong rhythm: About Hall Hall helps teams and companies communicate in real-time. Our all-in-one unified communications app has everything your company needs to communicate and get things done. There are thousands of companies using Hall, from small businesses to the world's largest enterprises like Amazon and Nike. Professionals love using Hall to communicate. Sentence structure is way too long, and confusing. Let me take a quick stab at it. About us: Hall aims to do one thing. Help your team communicate in real time. It achieves that with a state-of-the-art status panel. You can easily keep track of what your team is doing. Get things done by using our hassle-free communication tools. Its your own intelligence network. Who uses Hall to make their lives easier? Big Companies like Nike, Amazon to smaller team like yours. They all have one thing in common: No matter the size, everyone just loves Hall. But don't take our word for it. Try Hall now. See what you have been missing. Its free. By the way, go ahead and use that if you want. :) |