| I haven't tried it so these comments are just about the sales pitch: Have you talked to potential customers?
What do your potential customers want, what needs aren't being matched by someone else? Your opening sounds empty to me. Your product doesn't look like every other CRM tool, it doesn't look like peoplesoft, salesforce, sugarcrm. To me it looks a bit out of date. That's not necessarily a bad thing. I've worked with plenty of people that feel far more comfortable with something "more traditional". I would go with an opening selling the straight forward to the point nature of the product. Personally I prefer to see the price/buying options before I click a buy now button. You are selling a CRM product but your first screen shot is of a task list with personal items on it. Loose weight etc. As a customer this doesn't shout this software will help me manage customers and make more money. The description on the customers screenshot is incorrect. It looks like this is a product for a single person/freelancer as it doesn't allow sharing of data. That's going to limit your audience. Personally I'd sell/develop the customer management/communication features more - how is it easy to keep trac of conversations, does it hook into email can I merge my calendar? I'd consider a mobile version for people visting clients on site. |