None of us knows the exact situation but the fact that the person said his documentation was "complete, correct, and relatively terse" is a red-flag. It seems to me like smug over-confidence.
If the document really was so clear and error-free, then why would the boss try to "fix it"?
Assuming you're correct that the commenter is unaware of their communications deficiencies, then as much of your confident criticism should be directed at a manager who would silently change a spec sheet for some reason, and not coach the employee on why that was needed.
If it was truly a manager, where the main role of their job is to manage the performance of their employees, then they failed here.
If the document really was so clear and error-free, then why would the boss try to "fix it"?