[beardyw]

As mentioned text size is a problem. Sadly just about everything else is too. The text is so woolly it could be a sheep for all I know. You need real benefits to gain attention. What do your potential customers really need?

The artwork is inoffensive but like the text it says little and mostly just makes things look messy.

I would start again by asking "If I was customer x what would catch my attention as something that would be an obvious benefit". And leave anything else out.

Sorry if this is a bit brutal - maybe I'm in a bad mood!