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by vunderba 302 days ago
The story plot was "Meeting a dragon". As both a human and a writer, challenge accepted:

Long ago, there lived a golden dragon whose fractal-like scales gleamed in the glow of the morning in her cave. She was known for her kindness, and many came not with sword or spear, but with humble requests - for you see, it was widely believed that the mystical scales of a dragon would heal illness, cure ailments, and provide fortune.

One such visitor timidly looked up at her great shining body and beseeched, "Oh glorious dragon, might I have a single scale?"

Of course, the dragon replied warmly. She delicately, almost lovingly, with a slight twinge, used a single claw to prise off a single golden scale, leaving a dull patch.

Over the eons, more and more people would come as supplicants. The scales were used for good luck, for warmth, to ward off evil, as the draconic equivalent of a rabbit's foot.

In the end, the poor dragon was stripped bare - the fire from her burning furnace now showed clearly through to her patchwork, sensitive, and naked skin.

When winter came, she huddled in the cold darkness. And still, when a peasant would come asking for a scale - just one, a single scale nothing more, she would not refuse. In her eternal generosity she would carefully break off another. This time it took longer to find one left upon her body, as the humans had stripped her bare like a tree come winter.

Then thus came a knight. "I'm sorry, good sir, but I have no scales left to give," she said pitiably.

"Why, your scale was a choking hazard and wasn’t labeled not for ages under 5! Prepare for a class-action lawsuit and also to be impaled upon a lance."

The End.

I'll pretend I intended it as a parable of the destructive nature of mass tourism or something something Lorax something something truffula trees.

4 comments

For me, the part about "fractal-like scales" would have flagged the author as either an AI or just kind of a pretentious dummy, because that makes very little sense. "Then thus" would actually lean me toward human, because LLMs are usually better at grammar than that. :D
I think that humans do executive decision making better than LLMs.

So, yeah, your "Meeting a dragon" story was about a single point - an attempt at a humourous twist ending; you built your story around that.

My approach would be having the Dragon in the title be a metaphor, for something powerful, dangerous and scary:

1. Comedy: new g/friend meeting MiL (the Dragon) for the first time

2. Thriller: guy finds out what his wife (The Dragon) really is like, basically the plot to Gone Girl

3. Drama: An alcoholic anthopormorphising the addiction (The Dragon) as an uncontrollable beast within himself

4. Historical: An author examining the events of the Tuskagee Syphilis experiment in the legislated-racism (The Dragon) period of the time.

5. SciFi: "The Dragon is a Harsh Mistress" (enough said)

6. Action: The dragon is a legendary elder of a mystical martial arts sect ("Enter the Dragon" stuff)

7. Fantasy: An actual, literal Dragon!

This is before I've considered a single line of plot, a single character, or character motivation. It's before I considered tone and presentation (Narrative? First-person narration? Dialog-driven narration?)

I mean, before getting to actual plot, characters, setting, tone, etc ... I've already got my message figured out. That's executive decision making.

The LLM will not, when given the directive "Write the story 'Meeting the Dragon'" perform any executive decision making. You have to baby it through every step. Basically micromanage it.

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Thanks, I love it.