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by keybored
407 days ago
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Skimming the text it seems okay. Relatively simple sentences (simple sentences are not necessarily good, depends on the complexity of the subject). A string of simple statements are used to continue the narrative. More complex sentences are built up with a few colons (should be semicolons) and a stringing together of commas that I personally will never get used to. |
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