I 100% like your own voice more. Don't feel discouraged of using your own voice and style, that's actually a huge part of you that matters more than if the text is 1% more readable.
Thanks, honestly I agree in this case, but I decided before even trying the experiment to post Claude's output no matter what. I (not humbly) think I'm pretty good at succinct statements like in this case. Anything more than about half a page, the tide starts to turn.