The original title is much better for most audiences.
It provides an immediate identification challenge and response in the reader’s mind: “Am I really bad at [X]?”
The edited title is in the language of committee reports. “Delivery” and “actionable” are formal and passive words, without an immediate connection to the reader.
It provides an immediate identification challenge and response in the reader’s mind: “Am I really bad at [X]?”
The edited title is in the language of committee reports. “Delivery” and “actionable” are formal and passive words, without an immediate connection to the reader.