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by shruggedatlas
622 days ago
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It seems awkward because removing the parenthical expression between the commas leaves a broken sentence: "The data wasn't erroneous|who are legally forbidden to discuss tax filings." The best correction would be something like: "Treasury officials, who are legally forbidden to discuss tax filings, found the data wasn't erroneous." |
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"Treasury officials found that the data wasn’t erroneous, though they are legally forbidden to discuss tax filings."
The problem with the original text was that the rule that the officials had was said BEFORE the main point about what they found - which is why the "officials" were brought up in the first place.
This one states the important part of what they found, and then gave the addendum that they have a rule that adds a conditional to the nature of sharing the finding.
English is weird, by the way.