[AlecSchueler]

Did the other links a shared in the comment above preform better? Seems kinda funny that the whole conversation is focused on sentence structure with no mention of the content of the article. It really doesn't seem that bad to me.

[blharr]

The content is fine. That's probably because they copied the exact story from yahoo's article.

If you take a look the writing, quotes used and phrasing is nearly the exact same. They just reworded things.