[mariusor]

I'm not sure if you're trying to say that this output is better, but in my opinion it is very much not.

I don't think that someone that wrote "you fit into me", would use the abundance of qualificatives that this text has. Furthermore there's nothing of Atwood's style that I can detect in it. The only interesting bit for me is the inverted assumption that the voice that speaks to us is male, but I feel like even that's too lame of a device for something a veteran author would do.

> you fit into me

> like a hook into an eye

> a fish hook

> an open eye