[svat]

The page does have concrete examples in the very first section after the lead? https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Untouchable_numbe... (avoiding edits from today) — it gives the example of how 4 is not untouchable and why 5 is, and the example it gives of 5 is what the GP is asking about.

How would you suggest improving it?

[earthboundkid]

Neither example explains what a proper divisor is.

[svat]

It seems the root comment here had confusion/difficulty not with “proper divisor”, but with “the sum of all the” proper divisors.

In any case, if your problem is that this page doesn't explain "proper divisor", then note that the phrase "proper divisor" in the first sentence is a link that goes to the relevant section of the [[divisor]] article, which has lots of examples.

If the complaint behind “Math wiki pages are so bad” is simply that not every page explains everything from scratch but relies on the reader having to follow links, then this is an inherent property of a random-access reference work like an encyclopedia (rather than a careful linear presentation like a textbook), and the fact that mathematics is a subject with quite some depth (where understanding a topic requires understanding several others first).

This is not unique to mathematics articles, e.g. if you go to the Wikipedia article on "init", it says:

> In Unix-based computer operating systems, init (short for initialization) is the first process started during booting of the operating system.

where "Unix", "operating system", "process" and "booting" are wiki links: you need to follow the links if necessary and understand them first, as this page won't start by explaining what a computer is, what operating systems are, etc. This is true for basically all topics: clicking on https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Special:Random a few times, I find:

> Ustilaginoidea is a [[genus]] of [[fungi]] in the family [[Clavicipitaceae]].

where you need to understand "genus" and "fungi" first, or

> Masaumi Shimizu is a Japanese former professional baseball Catcher,and current the fourth squad battery coach for the Fukuoka SoftBank Hawks of Nippon Professional Baseball (NPB).

where "catcher", "battery" etc are links that need to be followed (this page won't start from first principles and explain sport, baseball, catcher, etc).

I think it may be instructive to compare Wikipedia math pages to something professionally published and edited like, say, The Princeton Companion to Mathematics. I just did that for a few random topics, and Wikipedia was in some cases easier to read and in some cases harder: it was not consistently better or worse. But doing this for more pages may be instructive — or simply pick some random math pages and show how they can be improved, while still remembering that in an encyclopedia much of the information necessary to understand a certain page will inevitably be at other pages.

[earthboundkid]

Yes, I clicked the link and read that. It wasn’t actually very relevant and did not help me understand the original article. I eventually figured it out on my own by, yes, examining the two examples they gave and proving to myself how it works. The article has a bad explanation.

Untouchable numbers are a very simple idea. Any elementary school student who knows about divisors and prime numbers can have it explained to them in about ten minutes. The Wikipedia page for the article should be pitched so that a layman can understand it.

I understand that if you’re writing a cookbook, you have to decide if you’re pitching it first time chefs who need “how to boil water” explained to them or professional chefs who just need references for some ratios. What serves one audience wastes the time of the other. If you want to know how init works, you probably already know what Unix is. If you’re looking up a particular species of mushrooms, you probably know how genii and species work.

Untouchable numbers is a simple concept. It should not be pitched at professionals first. It should start with an explanation that a middle schooler can understand and then move on to advanced explanations in later sections.

[svat]

I completely and very strongly agree that simple concepts should not be pitched at professionals, and should be explained as simply as possible! To get there, I'm trying to figure out the precise way in which you say this article could be better explained, and so far have got two answers:

• That there are no concrete examples on the page: this is not true, the page has a couple of concrete examples (the numbers 4 and 5), and I added a third one (the number 6) earlier today.

• That “proper divisor” and “sum of all the proper divisors” aren't explained: but these are explained on the pages (divisor and aliquot sum respectively) linked from the first two sentences of the article, in keeping with the nature of an encyclopedia.

So what is the problem exactly? What explanation/wording would you suggest? It may be easier to understand the general statement “Math wiki pages are so bad”, if there was an answer to “How would you suggest improving it?” for this specific wiki page.

[I have a theory, that this has to do with “depth”: to understand this concept one needs to understand, in order, (1) the idea of divisors, (2) the definition of a proper divisor of N as any divisor of N other than N itself, (3) the idea of the sum of all the proper divisors of N, (4) finally, the idea of an untouchable number, as a number not achievable as such a sum for any N. Each step is individually easy, but because of this ordering requirement, overall there is “depth”. In fact I actually think that any middle-schooler would have no trouble learning the concept from Wikipedia as it stands, if they read the relevant sentences from the relevant Wikipedia articles in order, e.g. the following from https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Aliquot_sum seems clear enough for (3):

> For example, the proper divisors of 12 (that is, the positive divisors of 12 that are not equal to 12) are 1, 2, 3, 4, and 6, so the aliquot sum of 12 is 16 i.e. (1 + 2 + 3 + 4 + 6).

It's just that no single page explains all four ideas in order. So the middle-schooler doesn't need to be an experienced mathematician, just experienced at reading Wikipedia and following links. (Arguably this is part of mathematical maturity, i.e. understanding definitions as needed until you can understand the original definition.)

The process you describe: “I eventually figured it out on my own by, yes, examining the two examples they gave and proving to myself how it works” seems to suggest things are working as intended; it's just the nature of mathematical concepts that they require a little bit of thought! As you say, “Any elementary school student who knows about divisors and prime numbers can have it explained to them in about ten minutes.” (I agree, and one doesn't even need prime numbers): about 5–10 minutes is how long it takes, but readers complain about mathematical articles because it's uncomfortable that reading a handful of sentences should require several minutes to understand, when actually this is inevitable. This reminds me of the “monad tutorial fallacy” https://byorgey.wordpress.com/2009/01/12/abstraction-intuiti... — after a bit of struggle to understand, when it eventually clicks, the reader says “ah it's so simple” and thinks that the earlier explanations were bad. But that's just my theory, and if you have a concrete suggestion for how the article could be improved, that may be revealing.]