[etrain]

Since you asked for it... the 'bro' style makes the thing unreadable. Not to mention the 'lol!'s that felt like they finished every sentence.

After seeing that you were here asking what's wrong with it, I decided to go back and actually read it. You make a good point, but it's lost in the froth of meaningless words.

I realize you might be cultivating a persona or trying to use rhetoric to support your argument, but in my view those actions weaken it. You have a good idea: 'Don't waste anymore time thinking, get out there and do it.' But, I think you'd be much more effective if you consolidated your argument and did away with the attitude.