| > This is a run-on sentence. No, it's not. A run-on is when two or more independent clauses are joined without a conjunction or the like. So "I went the store I bought bread" is run-on. In your example, "however" functions as the conjunction. It may be overly long and unwieldy and could perhaps do with a few more commas, but those are style issues. > "on down" is faulty parallelism. "As large as...on down to..." Not sure how that's faulty, sounds fine to my ears. If anything, this sentence should be criticized for seemingly talking about "passengers as large as a gun" at first parse. Not strictly grammatically wrong, but it's painful to make sense of. > Two ellipses in one sentence? Also not a grammatical error. > The phrase is "the be all and end all" or "the be-all and end-all". Says who, the great deity of idioms? I've heard and read it as "end all be all", although I'd prefer it was rendered as something like "end-all, be-all" or "end-all/be-all". > Leaving aside the content, it's just poorly written. Agree 1000%: it's unbecoming, tone-deaf, and totally off-putting. But those are stylistic criticisms, not grammatical ones. |
I’m not sure your parent was actually incorrect. Even you agree that his point stands, so your post is not constructive.