[soperj]

Nice concept. I really liked the beginning, but it comes a bit unglued at the end, too much explaining and not enough showing.

[user052919]

You know, someone else gave me similar feedback as well. I'm kind of reluctant to make it longer, but might be a better story if it is. Like: maybe have something about the government responses to it and what happens, etc, work some of the explanations in there. Going to keep this in mind, appreciate it!

[soperj]

I find that you can trust the reader to deduce a lot of what you are explaining without having to explain it.

[Nekhrimah]

Just to be contrarian, I like the ending. Always be wary of over-explaining in stories, especially in science fiction.