| This is flagged now--I assume because there's no "Show HN"? But, just wanted to add that if you read that blog post, it's extraordinarily good at relating to its audience and the problems they face. The problem statement is clear and concise. The example email excerpts are well chosen and highly relatable, giving the reader a chance to connect his/her own experience in an almost first-person voice. The itemized dead-end alternative paths are also relatable, and she does an excellent job of differentiating her offering from others the reader may have considered or with which the reader may have been disappointed. In all, it demonstrates considerable proficiency in precisely what she's offering: conversion. While the points about copyediting have some validity and some tightening could help solidify the offering, they are largely pedantic in the main. The only suggestion I would offer is that, this being a new product, it may be difficult to grasp exactly what you're getting and where it leaves you (i.e. how it's actionable). A before/after-style case study or example deliverable could go a long way there. |
And thanks for your assessment! It's certainly nice to hear that some things I aimed for landed.