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by 600frogs
1776 days ago
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Some unsolicited advice for you: * That initial "How to use it" diagram completely puts me off the product - it seems dizzyingly complex, and to have that right at the top before I even know what the product is seems like a mistake. * Consider getting a native speaker to review the text - the grammar is off in a fair few places. * Write a simpler paragraph for what your product does - I've read through the entire landing page, and your HN comment, and I still don't understand what it is you are selling. |
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