[rachelbythebay]

I definitely screwed that one up, and it's slightly different now. I was going for one of those voiceover-y "not having attained X, they went for Y instead" approaches and it fizzled. I think it's because it was too long and because it's text and not an actual voiceover. (If that makes sense.)

[eecc]

I got it, and indeed if you read it at “talking speed” it works ok.

By the way, I also appreciated the post. I’ve been in similar situations in several occasions and never quite figured out how to avoid stigma and bad feelings for stepping on other peoples’ ego. I’ll give your technique a try