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by jlgaddis
1951 days ago
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Since 1) this is supposed to be for "a non-technical audience" and 2) the target audience is parents of young children who feel it's necessary to monitor (in real-time) their child(ren)'s day care facilities in the first place, I can't help but think that your rewritten intro missed out on an absolutely perfect opportunity by failing to include -- for maximum effect and attention-grabbing, obviously -- terms like "pedophile", "child predator", and so on. (I'm only halfway joking.) |
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