|
|
|
|
|
by jsteinbach
1995 days ago
|
|
I don't want to comment on the content, but on the form. In my opinion there are two reasons to write such an article: a) To vent
b) To get a message around This article is a great and powerful vent (which also makes sense in the context of "healing journey"), but it does a terrible job at getting a message across. Bold messages lose their impact if there are more bold messages than normal text. Also the article is missing a clear red line - I felt myself skipping multiple paragraphs and not missing out on any content. I would be very much interested if the writer could re-write their vent into a powerful message. This might also be a chance (regarding the "healing journey") to re-work the happenings and bring the "this is what happened!!!" into a "THIS is what happened", in the same way an emergency-centre operator deals with emergency calls. Focus on the facts, not the feelings. |
|