[sab2]

Here's a small change you can make to engage users:

Tell them benefits not features. Users will like that more. Make all the bullet points speak for how awesome your product is!

[sab2]

PS: Also you need to choose who your target market is and appeal to them by probably writing it - For wallstreet veterans, new age tech ninjas, etc (I made these target demographics up- you could do it much better)