| I'll go through the article, posting some very nitpicky corrections until I get bored. These will all be arguable and my "corrected" versions are of course non-unique and probably themselves very imperfect. Personally I initially scanned the article so fast that I didn't really notice any of the phrasing oddities... > If we want to achieve any kind of bigger success This sounds awkward to me. Perhaps "In order to be successful" would work better? > because I have some tricks how to fool myself into work s/tricks how to fool myself into work/tricks for fooling myself into working/ > When it seems that I really do not feel like working This one isn't that bad, but it's sort of strange; the kind of thing I'd imagine someone with an accent would say. I'd take out the "it seems that" and change the "do not" to "don't" (I think the "really" in combination with the "do not" is awkward). > I even do not enjoy the food that much this way, as my mind is shattered by 5 different things. s/I even do not enjoy/I don't even enjoy/
Also, "shattered" is an odd word to use. I guess I'd say something like "my focus is split among 5 different things" or something like that. Anyway, I'm tired of this now. As I said, very nitpicky. Not to mention, native English speakers phrase things awkwardly all the time. |