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by shdc 2127 days ago
The premise of your argument is that explicitness comes at the expense of additional complexity. I believe this premise may be flawed.

Let's rewrite it from:

> We began this public review in early 2019 to assess the monetary policy strategy, tools, and communications that would best foster achievement of our congressionally assigned goals of maximum employment and price stability over the years ahead in service to the American people.

To:

"""

We began this public review in early 2019. The goal was to assess items relating to monetary policy ("Monetary Policy" has to do with the creation and management of money at a national level).

Those monetary policy items under review were the:

- strategy.

- tools.

- communications.

The goals of the policy review, which were assigned by congress, were:

- maximum employment.

- price stability going forward, for years to come, in service to the American people.

"""

I believe nothing has been lost from the original text, and that this is far easier to read and understand.

2 comments

Who do you think the target audience is? You seem to think that the target audience should be people on HN, or people who read less well even than us. That's not the actual audience. It's bankers.
Your version lost the congressional mandate. Took a bit to notice too since it's so wordy.