[tirrellp]

I went to the landing page and I dont immediately know what this service does or why I should buy it. Suggestion 1: Look at some copywriting tutorials and implement those lessons on your page copy. Suggestion 2: Dont hide behind 'Us'. Who are you? At the early stage, your personal story is important. When I click 'about us', I get sent to #Deliverable. Which is not what I'm looking for. Suggestion 3: Show me, don't tell me. Let me download an example from a well-known book of how you took the lessons and injected real-world applicability.

Hope this helps.