Ask HN: What about this landing page? Does it rock as it should?

[willflagello]

Hi everyone.

This is my first submit on Hacker News, but I've been reading and loving it for months now. Some friends of mine and I are developing a web app called Dayri that lets you keep your diary online. And as every startup, we had to design and ship a landing page. We would love to hear your feedback about it. :)

http://dayri.me/

I think that there are too many similar landing pages, if not alike, and therefore I came up with this. We wanted to give a unique look to Dayri and, at the same time, we tried to find a way to get more subscribers.

In your opinion how does it look? Is it comfortable or you get tired after the second scroll? We originally conceived five slides but we suddenly realized that it would have just bored the user and got him not to sign up for an invite.

Will

[lovskogen]

TL:DR

I though each slide had to much text for me to read before I could get to the point. I also missed exactly -what- this service did. It's market (why keeping diaries is good) not brand (why dayri is good).

[willflagello]

As I said in another comment, we didn't want to say anything about Dayri.

[kerben]

I thought the design was cool and creative and I agree with illdave that on an iPad the scroll is satisfying.

Can you please explain what is special about your diary? How is it different than a private blog?

I felt you emphasized the privacy policy a bit too much.

I thought you would appreciate the design of another site (also vertical scroll), see http://benthebodyguard.com

Good luck!

[willflagello]

Thank you kerben. I already knew Ben The Bodyguard and it is fantastic, I love it.

Well, let's say that Dayri will let you write about your day in less than 2 minutes. And it won't be a private blog, it's a completely different concept. :)

[rch]

Nice implementation, but your worries are justified. Try a high impact landing page, and redeploy this in an 'about' context. Maybe work a seamless sign-up, or some other 'action' into every slide as well.

If you are really keen on what you've got, compare it to this one...

http://thehagency.com/ http://thehagency.com/start.html

[willflagello]

Oh, well... That is fantastic. Many thanks for the feedback. :)

[icey]

The design looks nice, but the scrolling feels excessive.

[willflagello]

What do you mean exactly? Should I increase its speed?

[svmegatron]

I think increasing its speed would be good

[willflagello]

I'll increase the speed for sure. Thank you guys. :)

[sharadgopal]

I use OhLife[1] to keep a somewhat regular journal online. You all might want to check out their landing page, its very neat and to the point.

On your website, after about two scrolls, I didn't want to keep going. Also maybe make the font a little thicker/bolder. Good luck.

[1]http://ohlife.com/

[willflagello]

I already knew OhLife but thanks for the feedback. Sadly that font, bolder, is a bit ugly.

[rome]

I think it's very creative. It really got my attention and made me curious.

I agree with SethBroomer concerning 'itsworthit." I was looking for a bigger payoff than the well done layout and curious quotes.

I was looking for a big point to be made at the end. "How is dayri.me a brand new way?" Is the question I left with.

[willflagello]

Thank you for this precious feedback. I'll think about this. :)

[vshlos]

I thought its too much and by the time I click on it and it scrolled over, i forgot what the first part was. Also, too many screens to go through. Cool effect and unique, but i would do if for like 1 or 2 slides and quicker.

[willflagello]

Thanks for the feedback. We'll find a solution. :)

[illdave]

Clickable: http://dayri.me

I'm not really your target audience, but I just wanted to say that, on an iPad, that tap-to-scroll-down is extremely satisfying. :)

[willflagello]

Thank you for the feedback, illdave. We hadn't tested it on an iPad yet. Thanks. :)

[willflagello]

You can find a little preview of its design here http://drbl.in/VdP

Okay, it's not much but what do you think?

[seto28]

4 clicks just to get the form? I don't think so...

[SethBroomer]

I don't like the verbage here. I would Just say: Click on the page to go ahead. The "It's Worth it" is a turn off to me. I agree with set028 that 4 clicks to the bottom is way to much.

Instead maybe you could do something like this: 1. Have your logo and tag line at the top 2. In the center put your messaging and have the user either click it to scroll to the next message or do it automatically ever N seconds 3. Have the sign up at the bottom i.e. make it fit on a 1024x768 screen so that the user always sees your company name and how to sign up.

Hope that makes sense

[willflagello]

You're right, it's better without "It's worth it". Your idea is nice and you're also right about the logo because if you see the page for the first time you don't understand what it is about. But this is part of the "I want to know more about it" effect, even if I agree with you that the logo should be visible. It's just that in the page as it is now I don't know where to place it.

[willflagello]

Okay, but at least is something different. It's not just for getting to the form, we thought it would have been nicer than the other landing pages because you don't need a lot of time to get to the last "slide".

What do you think?

[iworkforthem]

I agree too.. after 2 clicks if I still dun get it, I leave. Suggest you put in your form after the 2rd click.

[willflagello]

Mmm... But with just 2 slides you don't understand much. It's also true that it already leaves you some questions because we didn't want to say almost anything about Dayri and how it works.

[iworkforthem]

People use to say that about Twitter.. How much can we say in 144 characters... :P

[manicbovine]

Should "everywhere" be "anywhere"?

To me, "Click everywhere to go ahead" means that, in order to proceed, I must click everywhere.

[willflagello]

I don't understand the difference but "anywhere" is nicer, it sounds better. :)