[avian]

Is it strictly a tech talk? As someone else said here, skip the cruft and get to the point. I came to your talk to learn about the technology, not your life story.

Some people are good at wrapping tech talks into interesting stories. But they are very rare in my experience. If you don't have a story to tell, don't force it. Don't try to present everything as this grand idea that's related to everything you've done since childhood. It gets old really fast.

I've seen students take a course in speaking where they hammer into them this "three act structure". Invariably, the talks they give would be much better if they would just stick to the technology.