| Quick first glance feedback on the page, take it or leave it: a) "the easiest way to" lowercase start and then "Write your life story" uppercase start. Seems weird to me. The other way around or both uppercase. b) Top bar seems empty, maybe an actual logo (that adds some other color/shade) would chance that. c) "See an example" needs no-Javascript fallback. I assumed a video behind it. Pleasant surprise to see something that finally showed me what it is all about. I strongly suggest not hiding that. It is below the break for me and adds a lot. d) Ned Flanders takes away the credibility and earnesty the page build up so far. Bad! e) "private, secure, & friendlier", the comma after secure seems out of place to me. I am not an english native but from what I know it would be more normal without it. "friendlier" is not a word, is it? Also, how is it secure if you do not tell me how you actually secure it (both for normalos and hackers please)...? f) entry is a bad empty word. I guess you already tried to find a better one. Can't think of one myself. :-( g) "a personal journal that you'll love to use" = you love the journal "why you'll love us" = you love the company h) "Oh snap, remember this?" same as Ned, does not fit the otherwise very noble theme at all. i) The open book has a weird shape. Does not feel right to me. Maybe if it was taller? x) No privacy policy (as a techie "only you can see your entries" screams for encryption against YOU (and/or hackers, this is important)), no contact, no nothing to make it human. y) Privacy tainted by Google Analytics. |
Friendlier is indeed a word, the comparative of friendly.
Amazing idea, by the way, beautifully executed and immediately captured my imagination.
[1] http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Serial_comma
[2] http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P_i1xk07o4g