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by netsharc
3328 days ago
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I'm about to go to bed so I only skimmed through the first 10-11 paragraphs, but how is your dad calling you, and what you used to do before, and how comfy your flight was, relevant to the story? Maybe it was, and hey, it's your story, but my thought was "Damn, he got off on a tangent, on a tangent!" |
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Yes, it is relevant.