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by sfeng
3387 days ago
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FYI: I don't know if English is your first language but you are using commas excessively. All the commas in the first four sentences should be removed and the final comma should be 'of'. EDIT: Also, the second sentence should be "This should not stop us (humanity)." |
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>This should not stop us, the humanity.
This doesn't seem like something a modern native speaker would say, but it's basically the same thing as in sentences like this:
Montfort was a younger son of Simon de Montfort, 5th Earl of Leicester, a French nobleman and crusader, and Alix de Montmorency.
, 5th Earl of Leicester, is inserted here to clarify meaning, the same way you might insert a group identifier after a we. Perhaps it might seem less out of place if he used it at the beginning of the sentence, like:
We, the humanity, shouldn't let this stop us.