[wtbob]

> For example, his tone is too formal and sounds bureaucratic. He refuses to state his actual request until the end of a long winded description of his clout and authority.

I see that as just being a professional adult. He states who he is, which implies why his opinion matters, then he states his opinion.

'Please don't do this kthxbye!!!1!cos(0)!!' is hardly more persuasive.

[WhitneyLand]

I see your point, but I think we have to account for the traditional business culture of software developers.

I think most in this culture lean toward informal speech, and toward stating your argument first and mentioning your credentials last, if at all.

I wanted to send him a private message with suggestions, but couldn't be sure it would be taken constructively and not be hurtful.